Chapter 2 writing
Subject: 2. Cause and effect many marriages end In divorce, often because love has failed. What are the causes of this failure?
No information, No happy marriage
Recently we can see that many couples usually are in conflict with each other and eventually they break up the marriage. Then why their love has failed? We can find many causes.
First, Personality's difference cause end of many marriages. All of people in the world have different personality. And some of them can be our friends and others may be our foes. If people get married to someone, they will live together in same place for very long period. While they live with each other, they find gradually their spouse's bad qualities and will be disappointed for them. If they don't understand each other and amend one´s conducts, then this conflict must be more serious. When one of spouse thinks that they can't solve problems between them, he or she will say to lover, "I want to divorce."
Second, the lack of communication also could cause the divorce. If one of them should live separately because of one's work, then they should care for communication of their family. They work busily while their lover misses them and they don't pay attention to their lovers because they have worked from morning to night, and are very tired. Then their spouse wait mate's call but they don't call for them.
Furthermore we can find many causes of conflict in couples. But all of problems in marriages have something in common. They didn't know information about their spouse before they get married. We should know and experience about our lover and find their pros and cons. (for example personality, job, where he or she lives now.) A marriage is very important event in our life. When we want to live with our lover, we should consider about our marriage life for long time. After you take account of it, you can sure that we can make happy marriage life, then we can avoid a domestic tragedy.
You've pointed out two evident reasons why married couples fail to sustain their love. I agree with your ideas that different personalities and lack of conversation have bad influence in relationships. It would have been even better to put one or two examples for better understanding below your supporting sentences. Also, I like how you ended emphasizing the importance of marriage and how it is essential to see it in a big picture as they have to live quite a long time together. Nice job:)
ReplyDelete-Dong Heui Kim
I liked the fact that you stated specific reasons about why people end up with a divorce. Since you started your writing with No information, No happy marriage, wouldn't it be better if you change the order of the last paragraph to the first?
ReplyDeletei agree to your writing that I also think the personality and lack of communication are the main reasons of the divorce. Your topic is lack of information of each other, so write about this topic more precisely in first paragraph would be nice. thank you for your writing/ YUN jung hwan
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