Wednesday, June 21, 2017

Kim, Jusung / Page 24, item B-2 / 2017 Summer Prose & Paragraphs

People with Which Birth Order Seems to Live the most appealing Life? (Ch1, Pt5, A-2, B-2)

1.     Main Idea: Children of younger birth order lives the most appealing life because they have less pressure from their parents, less responsibility in family, and more sufficient environment.

2.     Supporting Idea: Children of younger or youngest birth order's life is more attractive because…

1)    They do not need to feel the pressure or expectation to be at some standards like the oldest children would. If they do so, not as much as the oldest does.

2)    They relatively have to take charge on less things Because the oldest take most of the responsibility for the most time.

3)    Parents mostly become economically and socially sufficient as they get older. Which makes it easier and sufficient for the younger ones to do the things they want to do.

3.     Quotations from the readings

1)    "When a sibling arrives, he (first child) tries to suppress the view of himself as a child, and he struggles to be parental."(Forer, 23-24)

2)    "The parents themselves have been changed by the preceding child or children in many ways. They are more experienced as parents. …, but they (parents) are probably less tense and anxious about being able to care for them properly. The later children enjoy many advantages as a result of having more relaxed parents. They benefit from the tendency of parents to try out ideas on their first child and to be more tolerant with later children." (Forer, 29-25)

3)    "The baby of the family (youngest child) thrives on attention and tends to be outgoing, adventurous, optimistic, creative, easygoing and less ambitious than others in the family." (Withers, 37-39) 

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  2. Nice structure!
    You thesis statement was clear and I could easily follow your main idea.
    You also supported your idea with not only three supporting ideas but also with quotations from the readings which was great!
    If I have to make a suggestion, it will be more persuasive if you bring up an example of your own experiences (if you are the youngest, or if not others whom you know as the youngest) in your main writing.
    It will be easy for you to begin with this idea since it is already structured very well.
    Good luck!

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  4. First of all, it was quite easy to read out your idea because you did it in an outline instead of parahraphs. I can clearly see your main idea along with supporting details. I also liked how you made quatations for better understandings.
    Dong Heui Kim

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