Saturday, June 24, 2017

ji hwan kim/D initial drafts/summer 56

But love is blind and lovers cannot see The pretty follies that themselves commit; For if they could, Cupid himself would blush To see me thus transformed to a boy.-William Shakespeare

 

D initial drafts

 

The alter you are in your siblings, the more difficult live you may have

 

 I think the oldest child will live the most difficult. They should be parental, responsible, and capable, because the later children could imitate them or learn something from them. So parents may stern to the first child to prevent them from dishonesty, unkind, and bad behaviors. The first child may have fear of their parents. And parents want the first kids to achieve higher goals, for example passing particular university, working in the major company. The first children must effort more to achieve the goals. They should study more instead of playing with friends. So I think the first children live difficult. And the happiest ones are the youngest children. Their parents may stern not to them, because they are youngest in the family. Parents think often the youngest children are less capable, less responsible and weaker than older siblings. And their older siblings show them what is wrong and right. So they can learn before they do something or make a plan. For this reason I sure that the youngest children live easier than the first children. And my most appealing live is the only child's live. The only children grow up being the apple of his family's eye. I think that parents may not stern to the only children. Because they have not younger siblings and the parents could concentrate their love to the only children. The only children have no sibling, so they need to be not responsible, capable. If they cannot do something, their parents can intensively help them. So I appeal to the only children's life.

 

 

1 comment:

  1. It is nice how you wrote about the happiest, most difficult, and most appealing lives while others only focused on one. You made it easy to read with a good flow using appropriate transitions. Your supporting details are quite clear but it would be even better with examples to support your ideas. Moreover, I suggest you to make a little concise conclusion that can wrap up your points and end your writing with a good final sentence. Nice job!:)

    -Dong Heui Kim

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